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Witch Baby



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PostPosted: Wed Nov 19, 2003 8:25 pm    Post subject: poetry improv... GO! Reply with quote

here is the place, no preparation just start reciting whatever comes to mind, freestylin' flow, lets go


so you stand, wait, stop, wait, stop
stride in time to the changing lights
got all your intentions and your yellow smile packed
but you just don't leave
i said go
is there enough of you to make me
take me away
but there you are, glued to the curb, i can only wonder
i cannot cure this mundane disease of every day pavement gray
did i look the right way, because i'm pretty sure i havn't seen your face
until... now
never knew that glass could let the last minute sun shed its clouds and rays on... you?
it's a perfect cover, title of your independantly extended playing motor-mouth
get him the t-shirt and tell him to sit down
yell like you wanna but you can't 'cause you can't even pick up a pen
and scribble
but i double dare ya to shut up,
stop the incessant flow of self-serving jokes
maniac chatter
i don't know
i dont know you, or him or that other guy down the road
stacking boxes for the quarters they don't give him at home
so he can one day earn his ultimate revenu, and invest, spend it on the show-box house made of lego
and his shoe-box children
and his car that i tell ya it won't fit in a shoe-box
it'll be the biggest SUV on the block of gass-guzzlers and buissnessmen and empty vessels just like him. just like him.
i had a bad day but i know my name
i carve it, carry it past the local pseudo-journalists sipping canadiana corporate coffee and commerating candlesticks
i was raised by mine own true feet, amateur psychologists smashing windows
i never lived in a shoe-box, never mowed my green-turf lawn
growing up in a madhouse, a library, a room where you create the view
and you, better leave that corner now, just cross the street
i scream green, 'cause there's a few more demons wrestling with my path and you're not wanted to compete

i had a dream where they all met, my different men, different forks
and a courtroom ghost
i said i didn't want to grow up to be like him,
'cause his children will be
just like him.
just like him.

---
i'm pretty sure that was nuts
i may not be certified insane, but this could just prove a case

everyone else's turn go
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 19, 2003 9:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

all i care
and all i see
is true to you
and right for me

so please forgive me
when i feel down
or when the words
doesn't come around
because i care for you
and hope you for me

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crazy, eh? i like shorter poems. they feel more powerful. but i give kudos to adele for her rockin' words. she can crank 'em out like no one's biz
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 20, 2003 8:57 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

your dreams don't live here anymore,
grab your coat
get on the train
chase the sun out of this life
and wake in the new grass
that's been growing for so long

your dreams are out there
run or you'll miss it
you've got what you need
nothing's been forgotten
the light's going down
run faster
you've wasted time
do it now do it now do it now

your dreams will be there
I know its dark
but trust yourself
your soul and skill
merge into one
cast "i don't know" to the fire
and follow the sound
that you've been hearing forever.

your dreams are there.......right?

---------------------------

i don't fancy myself a poet, but this is just me convincing myself I am ready for the latest musical venture I'm working. Props to both Greg and Adele on their poems, both of which were outstanding!
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 24, 2003 6:53 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Dancing Under The Moon

Obsessive Compulsive,
Loving and sweet,
Tiny and fragile,
Ten toes,
Two feet,
Little baby,
Big heart,
Under the moon,
Dance with the Faes,
Kiss the vampires,
Ashy white skin,
Cold dark night,
Damp grass,
Sharp like knives,
Cut my feet,
Dance till dawn.

(Inspired by Tori's line 'Dance with vampires till dawn)
P.S. Say Witch Baby, I'm assuming you know of Francesca Lia Block?
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Witch Baby



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PostPosted: Mon Nov 24, 2003 8:37 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

isn't poetry improv lovely?
i love it when you talk funny greg... i mean g-dawg, b to the izzle??, and i enjoyed your poem, yours are always so raw emotionally (i love it), and yes its shortness just adds to the sweetness (i tend to write the length of the page i'm writing on and since this is unlimited...oh no!)
adam do you write songs? 'cause i can imagine that being one, and i love the constant theme of dreaming, its absolutely lovely

nymph thats a very original poem, i like the short phrases, it paints a picture, great wow
and yes i am rather addicted to francesca lia block's writing, isn't she unbelievable??!?

i think i'm in a better mood today, lets see


so you squared off, both eyes
flatly faltering, falsely laundering
there's no room for you here, boy but you like the way
your words take up to much space
invading, an army of seldom heard lines can't shake you
and the humblest thinker can't shake you
and the quietest song could break you

I am, the only lie you never told
I am the the holiness you lost racing down that same road
and I never became much of reminiscent ghost
i took my suitcase, stuffed with musty notes
I let me go

and they say to live each and every day
little prince, i said, just please
come and show me the way
'cause every night plays the waiting game
when this year closes down, that will be when I rise
and let the sun begin
I'll let you all in
until then
I watch and i paint, every shade of gray
on these walls, on my face
on my daring breathing singing name

when i searched for him i never did determine
where it is he lived
i forgot about the world and all we were given
and i'd like to think i forgot about your every whim

xxxx
hmmm, life is strange
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 24, 2003 9:52 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

i alone, am forging a new path,
blazing through the brush of political correctness
blended with human emotion.
these footsteps, along untouched ground,
imprint themselves permanently,
like that of sidewalk cement.............................


.........and i lost my train of thought since this keyboard i have at home sucks and i have to go back and delete all these accidental keystrokes. arg. i couldn't keep up with the rolling ideas i had come forth to me. Sad but it was about having to overcome a relationship and bushwack through the filed and woods, making an long hike to the next camp.... damn. i had the whole idea right in front of me Sad
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 27, 2003 12:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

walk away
walk away your time is over
did you really think
you had it in the first place?
killed desire
killed the want
brought a new part of you to life
and left behind another
the veil of lust has been lifted
and the truth has been revealed.
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 30, 2003 7:24 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

don't you hate when your bursting with ideas and soomehow you lose the connection
but what you wrote was lovely, the nature metaphor
and wow siren, the bit about killing desire is just what i need right now

i have nothing to contribute at this moment, maybe in a minnute or so
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 30, 2003 7:53 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

heh
thanks witchbaby Smile glad you liked it.
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PostPosted: Mon Dec 01, 2003 1:04 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks for the kind words, Adele. I actually don't write songs, because any words I write never translate well into a musical form. I appreciate the kind sentiment though. I've definitely enjoyed your writing as well, as it definitely conveys your emotions quite well.

hmmm, I'm in kind of a wallow-in-my-self-inflicted-unhappiness mood today:

Sitting in a shadow
I can feel frustration
flowing like a putrid river
winding through my troubled soul
washing over all the joy
and tainting all that was content

The light, I can see
and the warmth I can feel
like a mother's caring arms
reaching out and calling
my weary heart
to lay its head upon her breast.

I reach for absolution
but the darkness only follows
clouding vision 'til the shadow
is the only light I see.
And there is no absolution
for this blackened soul today
as the shadow I cast upon myself
pulls me back into its grasp....

********************************

I think I need a nap......
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PostPosted: Mon Dec 01, 2003 5:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

unhappy moods aren't nescessarily a bad thing, cuz wonderful writings like that come of it Smile
i really enjoyed that Smile
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 02, 2003 9:53 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thank you, Siren. Very Happy
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 02, 2003 5:53 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

i know. but oh well. it'll just be that unfinished poem. thanks adele!

i posted three yesterday. not improv stuff though.
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 02, 2003 9:52 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

down from the darkness
surrounding, coating, hiding
i want to run away
harsh lights, tacky colors
angry mobs ransack the town
can i just build a nest
and sleep it out
and come back when its over?
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 04, 2003 10:50 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

nice, sara Smile i like the darkness and deepness of the poem. i feel the same way. i want to hid, and wait it out, and come back, hoping things work themselves out for the better. of course, that doesn't work for me.
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 04, 2003 11:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

thanks greg Smile nothin' like the holidays to bring out the cheer in a person, eh? lol
glad you liked it Smile
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 04, 2003 1:39 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

oh, yeah. lemme tell ya. i bought a new sketchbook today to help me chart and expand on changes i want to make to myself. so its like my journal/sketchbook/notebook/photo album/personal identity now. i'm going to write everything in that (except my online journal entries), and write down all my thoughts and feelings, and every few weeks, go back and make self-assessments and see if i am progressivly changing..... does any of that make sense? its one of those ideas that is very easy to see but hard to explain.


teehehe. i also bought some vellum paper to print things on. vellum was my fave item to work with in graphic media Smile boy, i'm going to have fun. i'm thinking about minoring in art too.
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 04, 2003 1:43 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

thats cool greg Smile i'm nowhere near that ambitious lol
but good for you for minoring in art!!! you're so talented. you'd do well at that Smile
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 04, 2003 4:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

yeah... like when i bought that sketchbook today, i saw all these art supplies and knew that i want to progress my art talent a bit more. so i'm gonna talk w/ my advisors about minoring in art.
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 04, 2003 6:20 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

awesome possum!
although i think you should be an art major Wink



more sleep-deprived poetry coming from me later Razz
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 04, 2003 9:48 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

go through the motions of the routine
not caring what is said and done
torn away from what matters
but not caring at the same time
in time, this will be meaningless
and not a soul will care
what you did
in the end its who you knew
and who you know
that make it matter most
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 05, 2003 7:21 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Greg, that's awesome that you decided to pick up a minor in art. Good luck with that, as I hope it works out well for you (though I'm quite sure it will). And I really like your idea about keeping a journal/sketchbook/notebook/photo album/personal identity-sketchbook. I should do that, since I've noticed a few areas with myself I wouldn't mind tweaking a bit.

....and Sara. Your sleep-deprived poetry rocks! I really liked that Very Happy .
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 05, 2003 10:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

*blushes*
thanks adam
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 05, 2003 12:07 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

you are one song loud enough for me
but i do not sing for you
i finish my breath last and lightly
wave of light, the tune from my lips
and all those left wondering what it is i meant

--
felt like writing a short poem there
good work guys! glad to see this thread is thriving
its good to clear your head and just write
and yay greg art! it would be a crime for you not to make art
journal/sketch books can save, i swear good for you
i hope everyone is doing well
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 05, 2003 12:38 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice work, Adele. today the boredom of work has forced me to plunge into verse. Kind of a cheesy way to end this, but whatever (it is off the cuff after all.)

White lights, white walls.
pale and cold like the
gray clouds
before the white snow falls.
The dull darkness of the white
shrouds my empty eyes
as my mind sits upon
a plateau of bits and bytes.

Through this bright darkness,
the hand of a sylph appears
to fly me far from the
fluorescent white darkness
that clouded far too many hours.

As I hold her hand in mine,
I am lifted from the plateau
and the white parts like the Sea
showing color, frequency and form
that only dreams can dare imagine.

Her song is like a symphony
of familar and forgotten sounds
meshing into a web of harmony.
My mind expands
higher,
farther,
longer.
Like the limitless color
washing over me
to the ends of time and space.

This sound and color
created by the sylph's hand
touches my soul
and with all the energy of the sun
reverses the necropathy
of this young man's mind and soul

And as the song slowly fades
we descend from above
back to the earth
back to the real
back to the white
the slyph kisses my cheek
and ascends to whence she came.

But her words echo in my mind....
piercing the dullness with a
vibrant touch that
brings the song and color
back to these newborn eyes....

"This song is my gift and this color my life,
and your search ends in your soul
should you need to find it again......."
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